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The given map displays the changes of the past 57 years in Coastal Town which is also known as the Pentland.

The given map displays the changes of the past 57 years in Coastal Town which is also known as the Pentland. 0wp8Q
The given map displays the changes of the past 57 years in Coastal Town which is also known as the Pentland. It can be observed that a lot of people moved to Coastal Town by 2007 as the infrastructure and facilities became accessible for them in Pentland. The main structure of the town with one main road with two bisecting roads remained similar. Whereas, the industrial area of 1950 located in the northwest region of the map was replaced with a park, swimming pool, multi-storey car parking and some shops in 2007. The car park on the east side of the road was removed and towards the right side of the eastern road, many new apartments and shops were constructed. Towards the southeast side of the Pentland was mainly the grassland in 1950, but with time many houses were built in that corner. Rest of the grassland area of the southwest corner of Pentland was converted into a cinema. Also the sea was developed into Yacht Marina covered by a half-circled road.
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changes
of the past 57 years in Coastal Town which is
also
known as the
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Pentland
.

It can
be observed
that
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a lot of
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people
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moved
to Coastal Town by 2007 as the infrastructure and facilities became accessible for them in
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Pentland
.

The main structure of the town with one main
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road
with two bisecting
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roads
remained similar. Whereas, the industrial area of 1950 located in the northwest region of the map
was replaced
with a park, swimming pool,
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multi-storey
car parking and
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some
shops in 2007. The car park on the east side of the
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road
was removed
and towards the right side of the eastern
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road
,
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many
new apartments and shops
were constructed
.

Towards the southeast side of the
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Pentland
was
mainly
the grassland in 1950,
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but
with time
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many
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houses
were built
in that corner. Rest of the grassland area of the southwest corner of
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Pentland
was converted
into a cinema.
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Also
the sea
was developed
into Yacht Marina covered by a half-circled
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road
.
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IELTS academic The given map displays the changes of the past 57 years in Coastal Town which is also known as the Pentland.

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