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the given line graph, shows information on the consumption of fast food by Australian teenager during the year 1975 to 2000.

the given line graph, shows information on the consumption of fast food by Australian teenager during the year 1975 to 2000. Nw5am

The presented line graph, presents information on the total intake of fast food by Australian teenagers between the year 1975 to 2000. Having an initial glimpse at the data reveals that, the sales of hamburgers and pizza were shot up. Besides, this the fish and chips were tend to decline over the period. It is explicitly observed that, in the year 1975 the young people were less inclined towards pizza roughly 2 to 3 percent of the youngsters consumed it. However, as the year passed the eating habit of teenager in the country change markedly, as a consequence the consumption of pizza rose dramatically more than 80% in the year 2000. Whilst, coming towards the hamburgers, it is clearly noticeable that youth was not very much into eating it nearly, 10% in all had it in 1975. But due to change in taste preferences its sales were began to move upward in 1980 and by 2000, it was accounted for 90% more than any other product. Furthermore, the intake of fish and chips were plummet over the time, as it was booming in the year 1975. After that, it started falling and reached to its rock bottom point around 40% in 2000.

The presented line graph, presents information on the total intake of This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:quickrapidswiftprompt
fast
 food by Australian This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :juvenilesadolescents
teenagers
 between the You use this word too often, consider replacing it withperiodbreadthtermmileagespandiameter
year
 1975 to 2000. Having an initial glimpse at the data reveals that, the sales of hamburgers and pizza were shot
 up. Besides
, this the fish and chips were Consider using a past participle here: "tended".tended
tend
 to decline over the period. It is explicitly
 observed that, in the You use this word too often, consider replacing it withperiodbreadthtermmileagespandiameter
year
 1975 the young This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :individualsnationsociety
people
 were less inclined towards pizza roughly 2 to 3 percent of the youngsters consumed it. However
, as the You use this word too often, consider replacing it withperiodbreadthtermmileagespandiameter
year
 passed the eating habit of This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :juvenileadolescent
teenager
 in the country This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :alteradjust
change
markedly
, as a consequence the consumption of pizza rose dramatically
 more than 80% in the You use this word too often, consider replacing it withperiodbreadthtermmileagespandiameter
year
 2000. Whilst, coming towards the hamburgers, it is clearly
 noticeable that youth was not This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:extremelyimmenselysupremelysuperb
very
 much into eating it nearly
, 10% in all had it in 1975. This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:on the contrary
But
 due to This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :alteradjust
change
 in taste preferences its sales were Consider using a past participle here: "begun".begun
began
 to This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :relocate
move
 upward in 1980 and by 2000, it was accounted
 for 90% more than any other product. Furthermore
, the intake of fish and chips were Consider using a past participle here: "plummeted".plummeted
plummet
 over the time, as it was booming in the You use this word too often, consider replacing it withperiodbreadthtermmileagespandiameter
year
 1975. After that, it This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :initiated
started
 falling and reached to its rock bottom point around 40% in 2000. 