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The bar chart shows data about buying or drinking habits in five Australian cities.

The bar chart shows data about buying or drinking habits in five Australian cities. b21PX
The bar chart shows data about people's choices of the way they prefer to drink coffee in five cities of Australia. Overall, those who went to a cafe for coffee or tea in last weeks outnumbered those who fit in the other two categories in all cities except Adelaide. In all 5 Australian cities, the least popular habit was buying fresh coffee. The biggest difference between categories was seen in Sydney and Melbourne with significant dominance of those went to a cafe. Adelaide was the only city in which buying instant coffee was the most popular way of buying coffee. The city in which buying fresh coffee hits its all time low is Brisbane.
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coffee
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cities
of Australia.

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for
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or tea in last weeks outnumbered those who fit in the other two categories in all
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cities
except Adelaide. In all 5 Australian
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, the least popular habit was
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buying
fresh coffee.

The biggest difference between categories was
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seen
in Sydney and Melbourne with significant dominance of those went to a
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cafe
. Adelaide was the
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only
city in which
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buying
instant
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coffee
was the most popular way of
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buying
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coffee
. The city in which
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buying
fresh
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coffee
hits its
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low is Brisbane.
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IELTS academic The bar chart shows data about buying or drinking habits in five Australian cities.

Academic
  American English
3 paragraphs
114 words
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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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