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The given line graph indicates the numbers of people who prefer to use 3 major companies' mobile phones in Montreal from 2010 to 2015.

The given line graph indicates the numbers of people who prefer to use 3 major companies' mobile phones in Montreal from 2010 to 2015. DlXKa
The given line graph indicates the numbers of people who prefer to use 3 major companies' mobile phones in Montreal from 2010 to 2015. Overall, It can be seen that Apple phones were highly used by Montreal's people in given periods while a graph of Samsung phones were fluctuated. At the first glance, It can be observed that all the type of phones took a upward trend in proportion of people. Starting at 35 million people in 2010, the uses of Apple phone increased throughout the year which was 41, 47, 46, 50 million in 2011, 2012, 2013, 2014 with respectively and reached a peak of 68 million at the end of the period. Similarly, the figures for Nokia increased from 16millions to 39millions between 2010and 2012. After 2013 the numbers of people are remain same in last three year at 42 million for Nokia users. In 2010, Samsung users were at 26 million and took a peak point at 47 million in 2012. However, the number of users were decreased at 36 and 32 million in 2013 and 2014 but in 2015 this numbers increased at 44milions which was almost near to the users of No
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