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The given line graph indicates the number of both men and women per 1000 people smoking in Someland over a 40-year period, beginning from 1960.

The given line graph indicates the number of both men and women per 1000 people smoking in Someland over a 40-year period, beginning from 1960. kx6OK
"The given line graph indicates the number of both men and women per 1000 people smoking in Someland over a 40-year period, beginning from 1960. Overall, it is obvious that the smoking rate for men noticeably decreased over the given time frame, the opposite was true for the figure for women smoking in Someland. Especially, it is evident that the smoking rate among men is higher than the other gender in a time frame As can be seen from the graph, the number of smoking women hit the lowest point through 40 years, standing at 100 per 1000 people in 1960 and also 6 times less than that of smoking men at the same time. 15 years later, an remarkable increase was seen in the smoking women rate which climbing from 100 to 300 per 1000 people between 1960 and 1975 then dropped steadily in the rest of the given time, which was 200 people in 2000 In terms of men, the year 1960 saw the highest in the rate of smoking in Someland, followed by a considerable drop of 350 people till 2000, which stood at 250 people, compared to 200 people in the women smoking rate. "
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IELTS academic The given line graph indicates the number of both men and women per 1000 people smoking in Someland over a 40-year period, beginning from 1960.

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