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The shown maps give the information of an island before and after the construction of different facilities for tourists.

The shown maps give the information of an island before and after the construction of different facilities for tourists. GLNYB
The presented maps delineate how an island changed throughout the years by constructing numerous facilities for visitors. Overall, an island which had a modicum of trees, is witnessed drastic changes by building accommodation along with a plethora of luxury facilities. Firstly, an island had one beach at its western side which was modified later and got a swimming area. In addition, they got a reception where they could administer different activities. The eastern part remained unchanged; however the northern part got a restaurant which was connected to the reception by vehicle track. Furthermore, the authorities had constructed the pier at southern side along with two boats. Secondly, after constructing a footpath as well as vehicle track, they connected every hotels with eachothers which led them to different destinations. Interestingly, trees of the western area remained as it was and they surrounded by multiple accommodation and hence an island got developed by building plethora of buildings.
The presented maps delineate how an
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island
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changed
throughout the years by constructing numerous facilities for visitors.

Overall
, an
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island
which had a modicum of trees,
is witnessed
drastic
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changes
by building accommodation along with a plethora of luxury facilities.

Firstly
, an
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island
had one beach at its western side which
was modified
later and
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got
a swimming area.
In addition
, they
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got
a reception where they could administer
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different
activities. The eastern part remained unchanged;
however
the northern part
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got
a restaurant which
was connected
to the reception by vehicle
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track
.
Furthermore
, the authorities had constructed the pier at southern side along with two boats.

Secondly
, after constructing a footpath
as well
as vehicle
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track
, they connected every
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hotels
with
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eachothers
which led them to
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different
destinations.
Interestingly
, trees of the western area remained as it
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was and
they surrounded by multiple accommodation and
hence
an
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island
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got
developed by building plethora of buildings.
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IELTS academic The shown maps give the information of an island before and after the construction of different facilities for tourists.

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