Do you want to improve your writing? Try our new evaluation service and get detailed feedback.
Check Your Text it's free

The given line graph illustrates the information about the proportion of using public transport and private cars by Australian people from 2000 to 2010

The given line graph illustrates the information about the proportion of using public transport and private cars by Australian people from 2000 to 2010 Kxl3
The given line graphs illustrate the information about the proportion of using public transport and private cars by Australian people from 2000 to 2010. Overview, Sydney people were used most of the public transport. However, Melbourne was recorded at lowest point. Second graph showed Melbourne city masses are used most of the time private cars. The percentage of people using public transport in 2016 people were used 20% public transport, but after ten year the graph was slightly down and reached 70%. Secondly perth was the city where people used mostly people public transport. It was recorded near about 15% in 2000. Increased slowly upward but in 2010 back reached at same number of uses Canberra city people were used buses with the same proportion whole year from 2000 to 2010. Adelaide was showed flucation throughout the time period. However, in 2000 the highest percentage of the Melbourne city that was recorded with 80% and data was increased with time and reached 90% in 2010. It was followed by Perth City also showed upward trend. It was started with 60% and reached 80% in 2010. Adelaide Canberra and Melbourne people were used more private cars with the time period.
The
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
given
line graphs illustrate the information about the proportion of using
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
public
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
transport
and private cars by Australian
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
from 2000 to 2010.

Overview, Sydney
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
were
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
used
most of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
public
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
transport
.
However
, Melbourne
was recorded
at lowest point. Second graph
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
showed
Melbourne city masses are
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
used
most of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
time
private cars.

The percentage of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
using
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
public
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
transport
in 2016
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
were
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
used
20%
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
public
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
transport
,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
after ten year the graph was
slightly
down and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
reached
70%.
Secondly
Possible spelling mistake found.
perth
was the city where
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
used
mostly
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
public
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
transport
. It
was recorded
near about 15% in 2000. Increased
slowly
upward
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
in 2010 back
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
reached
at same number of
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
uses
Canberra city
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
were
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
used
buses with the same proportion whole year from 2000 to 2010. Adelaide was
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
showed
Possible spelling mistake found.
flucation
throughout the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
time
period.

However
, in 2000 the highest percentage of the Melbourne city that
was recorded
with 80% and data
was increased
with
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
time
and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
reached
90% in 2010. It
was followed
by Perth City
also
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
showed
upward trend. It was
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
started
with 60% and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
reached
80% in 2010. Adelaide Canberra and Melbourne
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
were
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
used
more private cars with the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
time
period.

IELTS academic The given line graph illustrates the information about the proportion of using public transport and private cars by Australian people from 2000 to 2010

Academic
  American English
4 paragraphs
199 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • ?
    Include an introduction and conclusion
  • ?
    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • ?
    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • ?
    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Labels Descriptions
  • ?
    Currently is not available
  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
Recent posts





Get more results for topic:
  • The given line graph illustrates the information about the proportion of using public transport and private cars by Australian people from 2000 to 2010