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The given line graph demonstrates the proportion of visitors to Scotland visiting three different attractions namely aquarium, castle, zoo, and festival in a 30-year period, starting from 1980.

The given line graph demonstrates the proportion of visitors to Scotland visiting three different attractions namely aquarium, castle, zoo, and festival in a 30-year period, starting from 1980. kWEaK

The given line graph demonstrates the proportion of visitors to Scotland visiting three different attractions namely aquarium, castle, zoo, and festival in a 30-year period, starting from 1980. On the whole, it is obvious that the percentage of sightseers who went to castle and zoo in Scotland significantly increase while that who visited festival and aquarium decline noticeably over the period. As can be seen from the graph, the percentage of people visiting aquarium hit the highest point at 35 percent in 1985 and then, dramatically decreased at about nearly 10 percent at the end of the period. There was a gradual fall in the proportion of tourists to Scotland who visited festival between 1980 and 2010. Stand at 40 percent, the proportion of sightseers who paid a visit at Scotland castle in 1995 was nearly twice as high as that in 1980. From 1980 to 2000, there was a fluctuation in the percentage of people visiting zoo in Scotland. In 10 years later, that rose dramatically to 20 percent.

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