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Map of Brandfield with two proposed sites for a shopping mall

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The map illustrates plans for two possible sites for a shopping mall in the city of Brandfield. It can be seen that the two sites under consideration are in the north and the south east of the town. The first possible site for the shopping mall, S1, is just north of the city centre, above the railway line, which runs from the south east of the city to the north west. If it is built here, it will be next to a large housing estate, thus providing easy access for those living on the estate and in the city centre. It will also be next to the river that runs through the town. The site in the south east, S2, is again just by the railway line and fairly close to the city centre, but it is near to an industrial estate rather than housing. There is a main road that runs through the city and is close to both sites, thus providing good road access to either location. A large golf course and park in the west of the town prevents this area from being available as a site.
The map illustrates plans for two possible
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sites
for a shopping mall in the city of
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Brandfield
. It can be
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seen
that the two
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sites
under consideration are in the north and the
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south east
of the town.

The
first
possible
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site
for the shopping mall, S1, is
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just
north of the city
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centre
, above the railway line, which runs from the
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south east
of the city to the
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north west
. If it
is built
here, it will be
next
to a large housing estate,
thus
providing easy access for those living on the estate and in the city
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centre
. It will
also
be
next
to the river that runs through the town.

The
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site
in the
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south east
, S2, is again
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just
by the railway line and
fairly
close to the city
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centre
,
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but
it is near to an industrial estate
rather
than housing.

There is a main road that runs through the city and is close to both
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sites
,
thus
providing
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good
road access to either location. A large golf course and park in the west of the town
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prevents
this area from being available as a
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site
.
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IELTS academic Map of Brandfield with two proposed sites for a shopping mall

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  American English
4 paragraphs
190 words
6.0
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