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The given line graph compares Australian exports’ proportion to four various nations for a period of 22 years between 1990 and 2012.

The given line graph compares Australian exports’ proportion to four various nations for a period of 22 years between 1990 and 2012. QlX6y
The given line graph compares Australian exports’ proportion to four various nations for a period of 22 years between 1990 and 2012. Looking at the chart, it can be seen clearly that the percentage of exporting goods to China and India increased whereas exporting to the US and Japan decreased. In 1990, the volume of goods exported to Japan accounted for 26% of total Australian exports which was much higher than the combination of that to 3 remaining countries. This figure underwent a sharp drop to 20% in 1995, followed by another fall to around 17% over 17 years. The figure for the US, starting at the second-highest position at 11%, experienced a fluctuation between 8% and 11% over the next 10 years and dropped considerably to 5% in the following 10 years of the period prior to rise slightly to 7% in 2012. The export to China has significant growth over the period, starting from 2% in 1990 and this number rose 14 times in the final researched year, making China become the biggest export market. The percentage of exports to India remained unchanged until 2000 and then increased to about 7% in 2010, previously dropping slightly to roughly 5% in 2012.
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line graph compares Australian
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proportion to four various nations for a period of 22 years between 1990 and 2012.

Looking at the chart, it can be
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that the percentage of exporting
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to China and India increased whereas exporting to the US and Japan decreased.

In 1990, the volume of
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exported to Japan accounted for 26% of total Australian
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which was much higher than the combination of that to 3 remaining countries. This figure underwent a sharp drop to 20% in 1995, followed by another fall to around 17% over 17 years. The figure for the US, starting at the second-highest position at 11%, experienced a fluctuation between 8% and 11% over the
next
10 years and dropped
considerably
to 5% in the following 10 years of the period prior to rise
slightly
to 7% in 2012.

The
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to China has significant growth over the period, starting from 2% in 1990 and this number rose 14 times in the final researched
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, making China become the biggest
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market.
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The
percentage of
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to India remained unchanged until 2000 and then increased to about 7% in 2010, previously dropping
slightly
to roughly 5% in 2012.
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IELTS academic The given line graph compares Australian exports’ proportion to four various nations for a period of 22 years between 1990 and 2012.

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