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adults with overweight, double diagram

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These two graphs give some information around people who struggling with overweight. The bar chart depicts the percentage of excessively overweight adults for 6 decades whereas the pie chart illustrates a number of weights of the grown-up people in one year. It is clear that the society has become fatter and fatter among 50 years period between 1965 to 2015. On the one hand, we can see a slightly growth along 3 decades from 1965 to 1985; But on the other hand, after that the number of pudgy grown-up people increased significantly. The pie diagram refers to wide range of obese adults which depicts approximately a third of them were corpulent, also fat people was in the second place and a dangerous fattish got a tiny proportion. According to the type of overweight’s proportions, healthy and underweight ones had a smaller community, in which we should be concerned about measurements of increasing fattening.

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some
 information around You use this word too often, consider replacing it withcrowdfamilycommunitynationsocietypublic
people
 who struggling with overweight. The bar chart depicts the percentage of excessively
 overweight adults for 6 decades whereas the pie chart illustrates a number of weights of the grown-up You use this word too often, consider replacing it withcrowdfamilycommunitynationsocietypublic
people
 in one year.

It is This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :apparent
clear
 that the society has become fatter and fatter among 50 years period Use "between" + "and" not "to."  Try this: "between 1965 and 2015".between 1965 and 2015
between 1965 to 2015
. On the one hand, we can This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :witness
see
 a You used an adverb ('slightly') instead of an adjective, or a noun ('growth') instead of another adjective.
slightly growth
 along 3 decades from 1965 to 1985; This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:on the contrary
But
on the other hand
, after that the number of pudgy grown-up You use this word too often, consider replacing it withcrowdfamilycommunitynationsocietypublic
people
 increased significantly
.

The pie diagram refers to wide range of obese adults which depicts approximately a third of them were corpulent, also
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :chubby
fat
You use this word too often, consider replacing it withcrowdfamilycommunitynationsocietypublic
people
 was in the second place and a This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:hazardousrisky
dangerous
Possible spelling mistake found.flattish
fattish
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :acquired
got
 a tiny proportion. According to the type of overweight’s proportions, healthy and underweight ones had a smaller community, in which we should be concerned
 about measurements of increasing fattening. 