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The given graphs show the actions taken after half a year by graduated students from two different courses of two different graduation years.

The given graphs show the actions taken after half a year by graduated students from two different courses of two different graduation years. DrRm
The given graphs show the actions taken after half a year by graduated students from two different courses of two different graduation years. In general, the majority of all graduates got employed and this percentage of employees was slightly higher in engineering class. Diagrams display that the history graduates are more likely to take further studies when the engineering graduates prefer working or searching for a job. Five percent of history graduates took a time out when only two or three percent of engineering graduates took a break. If we compare the differences between first- and second-year graduates, first-year graduates prefer doing study more than the second group.
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the actions taken after half a year by graduated students from two
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different
courses of two
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different
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graduates
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got
employed and this percentage of employees was
slightly
higher in engineering
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class
.

Diagrams display that the history
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graduates
are more likely to take
further
studies when the engineering
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graduates
prefer working or searching for a job. Five percent of history
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graduates
took a time out when
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only
two or three percent of engineering
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graduates
took a break. If we compare the differences between
first
- and second-year
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graduates
,
first
-year
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graduates
prefer doing study more than the second group.
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IELTS academic The given graphs show the actions taken after half a year by graduated students from two different courses of two different graduation years.

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108 words
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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