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The given graphs demonstrate the quantity of money spent by parents in pounds and the number of children attenders in different sport branches in Britain, from 2008 to 2014.

The given graphs demonstrate the quantity of money spent by parents in pounds and the number of children attenders in different sport branches in Britain, from 2008 to 2014. wg8d
The given graphs demonstrate the quantity of money spent by parents in pounds and the number of children attenders in different sport branches in Britain, from 2008 to 2014. Overall, parents spent more money than each past year, whereas football was the most attractive sport for children. The quantity of money parents spent for the sport activities of children increased year-by-year. While in 2008 it was 20 pounds per a month, this amount increased 5 pounds in every passing 2 years, and reached almost 33 pounds. Nevertheless, the highest escalation was observed from 2012 to 2014 with 7 pounds increase. In terms of sport branches that children participated, football possessed the highest number of participations. In every year, this number was higher than 7, 5 millions. However, in 2012 it reached the peak with approximately 8, 5 millions and remained stable in next years. Furthermore, despite the fact that number of children who participated in athletics was approximately 300, 000 and almost 2 million lower than children preferred swimming, this rate reached the levels of 5 millions and passed swimming. From beginning to the end of period, the number of children attenders in swimming rose gradually until about 4. 5 millions.
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children
attenders in
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branches in Britain, from 2008 to 2014.

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, parents spent more money than each past
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year
, whereas football was the most attractive
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sport
for children.

The quantity of money parents spent for the
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sport
activities of
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children
increased year-by-year. While in 2008 it was
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20 pounds
per a month, this amount increased
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5 pounds
in every passing 2 years, and reached almost
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33 pounds
.
Nevertheless
, the highest escalation
was observed
from 2012 to 2014 with
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7 pounds
increase.

In terms of
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sport
branches that
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children
participated, football possessed the highest
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number
of
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participations
. In every
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year
, this
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number
was higher than 7, 5
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millions
.
However
, in 2012 it reached the peak with approximately 8, 5
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millions
and remained stable in
next
years.
Furthermore
, despite the fact that
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number
of
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children
who participated in athletics was approximately 300, 000 and almost 2
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million
lower than
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children
preferred swimming, this rate reached the levels of 5
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millions
and passed swimming. From beginning to the
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end
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of
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children
attenders in swimming rose
gradually
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IELTS academic The given graphs demonstrate the quantity of money spent by parents in pounds and the number of children attenders in different sport branches in Britain, from 2008 to 2014.

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