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The chart below shows the proportions of graduates from Brighton University in 2019 entering different employment sectors. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the proportions of graduates from Brighton University in 2019 entering different employment sectors. mOVn
The presented pie chart illustrates the percentage of employment sectors chosen by Brighton university’s graduates in 2019. It is evident from the graph that the proportion of the graduates who worked in service industries and manufacturing industry presented approximately 50 per cent of the total number of Brighton university’s graduates. According to what is apparent, the percentage of graduates who worked in service industries represented 33 per cent, while the manufacturing industry represented 16. 3 per cent. Moreover, the ratio of graduates who chose the field of politics and government reached 12. 1 per cent, while education represented 14. 7 per cent. Apart from this, the proportion of graduates who worked in transportation and warehousing, science and technology and civil service represented 7. 8 per cent, 7. 3 per cent and 5. 6 per cent, respectively. Furthermore, the ratio of graduates who worked in the charity and the field of sport was less than 1 per cent. To conclude, we could say that the proportion of the graduates who worked in service industries represented the highest ratio at 33 per cent, while the percentage of the graduates who worked in the field of sport represented the less ratio at 0. 1 per cent.
The presented pie chart illustrates the percentage of employment sectors chosen by Brighton university’s
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presented approximately 50 per cent of the total number of Brighton university’s graduates.

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33 per cent, while the manufacturing
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16. 3 per cent.
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reached 12. 1 per cent, while education
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14. 7 per cent.

Apart from this, the proportion of
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7. 8 per cent, 7. 3 per cent and 5. 6 per cent,
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worked in the charity and the field of sport was less than 1 per cent.

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IELTS academic The chart below shows the proportions of graduates from Brighton University in 2019 entering different employment sectors.

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