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the given graph shows the main resoucres of energy in USA

the given graph shows the main resoucres of energy in USA PRLRj
The assigned pie charts illustrate the comparison of power production from five distinct resources in the USA between 1980 and 1990. Overall, it is noticeable that the power generation from oil and natural gas declined except other three sources. Scrutinizing the key features, in 1980, the highest proportion, 42%, of energy was observed from oil, which plunged to 33% in 1990. However, equal and minimum amount of electricity was produced from hydroelectric and nuclear power in 1980 at 5%. After one decade, at 10%, the former resource generated twice as much energy as the latter one, which produced 5%. Moving further, as far as natural gas was concerned, the proportion of energy produced was 26% in 1980 followed by a slight decline to a quarter of total in 1990. Take coal into consideration, 22% power was generated from this source in 1980 and it experienced an incline of 5% in last year.
The assigned pie charts illustrate the comparison of
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production from five distinct resources in the USA between 1980 and 1990.

Overall
, it is noticeable that the
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power
generation from oil and natural gas declined except other three sources.

Scrutinizing the key features, in 1980, the highest proportion, 42%, of energy
was observed
from oil, which plunged to 33% in 1990.
However
, equal and minimum amount of electricity
was produced
from hydroelectric and nuclear
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power
in 1980 at 5%. After one decade, at 10%, the former resource generated twice as much
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energy


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as
the latter one, which produced 5%.

Moving
further
, as far as natural gas
was concerned
, the proportion of energy produced was 26% in 1980 followed by a slight decline to a quarter of total in 1990. Take coal into consideration, 22%
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power
was generated
from this source in 1980 and it experienced an incline of 5% in last year.
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