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Development in the city from 1986 to the present day

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Two maps below the developmet in the city from 1986 to the present day over the period of more than twenty years. Overall, it is apparent significant changes in the housing which indicates a higher population. First of all the town located on the east side of the river. The big are turned by farmland in the south west side and north east side of the city. A post office and shops were located beside the farm to the north side near the bridge. There was a primary school opposite the post office and in front of the garden. The bridge over the river stoke still stands as it did in 1986 farmland and shops turn into with houses constructed ahead to the primary school. The gardens that were near the three large houses have been removed and houses converted a retirement home by adding more houses.
Two maps below the
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developmet
in the city from 1986 to the present day over the period of more than twenty years.
Overall
, it is apparent significant
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changes
in the housing which indicates a higher population.
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First of all
the town located on the east side of the river. The
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big
are turned
by farmland in the
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south west
side and
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north east
side of the city. A post office and shops
were located
beside the farm to the north side near the bridge. There was a primary school opposite the post office and in front of the garden. The bridge over the river stoke
still
stands as it did in 1986 farmland and shops turn into with
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houses
constructed ahead to the primary school. The gardens that were near the three large
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houses
have
been removed
and
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houses
converted a retirement home by adding more
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houses
.
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IELTS academic Development in the city from 1986 to the present day

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