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In this bar chart Number of trips made by school children in one country to travel in 1990 and 2010,and using different transports .

In this bar chart Number of trips made by school children in one country to travel in 1990 and 2010, and using different transports. PRL5d
The provided bar graph represent the information about several trips made by school children and using different modes of transport in particular nation in two different years 1990 and 2010. Overall, maximum number of children preferred to walk while trip in the year of 1990. However, after two decades a large proportion of students used car for travelling. On analyzing the bar chart, it becomes lucid that in 1990, 4% students like to do travel by car. Moreover, more than 12% school children preferred to walk during the trip. During the same year, near about 6% pupils used bus and cycles for trip. It is interesting to note that after 20 years, car passengers increased from 4% to 11%. In spite of this, children also used cycles and bus for trip and its proportion were 2% and 5% respectively. To move further, 3% students went on trip by walking and bus.
The provided bar graph represent the information about several
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trips
made by school
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children
and using
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different
modes of transport
in particular
nation in two
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different
years 1990 and 2010.

Overall
, maximum number of
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children
preferred to walk while
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trip
in the
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year
of 1990.
However
, after two decades a large proportion of students
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used
car for travelling.

On analyzing the bar chart, it becomes lucid that in 1990, 4% students like to do travel by car.
Moreover
, more than 12% school
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children
preferred to walk during the
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trip
. During the same
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year
, near about 6% pupils
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used
bus and cycles for
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trip
. It is interesting to note that after 20 years, car passengers increased from 4% to 11%.
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this,
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children
also
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used
cycles and bus for
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trip
and its proportion were 2% and 5%
respectively
. To
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move
further
, 3% students went on
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trip
by walking and bus.
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IELTS academic In this bar chart Number of trips made by school children in one country to travel in 1990 and 2010, and using different transports.

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