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The given graph provides information on the number of inquiries the tourist information office in a city and period over the time period of six months in 2011.

The given graph provides information on the number of inquiries the tourist information office in a city and period over the time period of six months in 2011. aQPB7
The given graph provides information on the number of inquiries the tourist information office in a city and period over the time period of six months in 2011. In this illustration, I will summarize the data and provide relevant comparisons. To begin with, the graph is projected by telephone to collect data in January was almost 900. While by latter/e-mail that was nearly 800. On the other hand, in a person outright to get the information was practically 450. In February, that was predicted to constant but decreased from January. In the March to June, via the latter about inquiries is indicated drop off 800 to less than 390. While by telephone as a media is got increased but in March to April that was expected similar. Whereas, In a person had come to enquiries was predicted to rise in March and go up, and in May almost 1600. to compare other two-way latter mail and telephone. The telephone was projected to rise In may, close to the medium in a person. Turn to remain data set. Via telephone and in a person was projected to rise simultaneously. May to June in 2011, they were rose up kind of same, but in the telephone that was 1400 and in June it was increased in 1600. Having said that in a person in June is expected to pick the highest 1900 times data enquires. Where the latter/email was predicted to pick the lowest point below the 400.
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graph provides information on the number of inquiries the tourist information office in a city and period over the time period of six months in 2011. In this illustration, I will summarize the
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data
and provide relevant comparisons.

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is projected
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telephone
to collect
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data
in January was almost 900.
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by latter/e-mail that was
nearly
800.
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, in a
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person
outright to
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get
the information was
practically
450. In February, that
was predicted
to constant
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but
decreased from January. In the March to June, via the latter about inquiries
is indicated
drop off 800 to less than 390. While by
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telephone
as
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a media
is
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got
increased
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but
in March to April that was
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expected
similar. Whereas, In a
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person
had
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come
to
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enquiries
was predicted
to rise in March and go up, and in May almost 1600.
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to
compare other two-way latter mail and
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telephone
. The
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telephone
was projected
to rise In
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may
, close to the medium in a person.

Turn to remain
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data
set. Via
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telephone
and in a
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person
was projected
to rise
simultaneously
. May to June in 2011, they were rose up kind of same,
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but
in the
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telephone
that was 1400 and in June it
was increased
in 1600. Having said that in a
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person
in June is
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expected
to pick the highest 1900 times
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data
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enquires
.
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Where
the latter/email
was predicted
to pick the lowest point below the 400.
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IELTS academic The given graph provides information on the number of inquiries the tourist information office in a city and period over the time period of six months in 2011.

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246 words
6.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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