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The given graph illustrates the popularity of Australian children and the youngsters by the numbers and the percentages for a 80-year-period,starting from 1958.

The given graph illustrates the popularity of Australian children and the youngsters by the numbers and the percentages for a 80-year-period, starting from 1958. JV0QE
The given graph illustrates the popularity of Australian children and the youngsters by the numbers and the percentages for a 80-year-period, starting from 1958. Overall, there is a upward trend in percent chart, whereas millions chart recieved an opposite one. It is obvious that the numbers of children aged 0-14 years reached the highest point at 30% in the starting year, and turned to the million chart at the end of the period. The percentage of kids then decreased slightly before having a fluctuation from 2014 to the ending. On the other hand, the millions one hit a small peak at 4 after gradually increasing from 1958 to 1970. This was followed by a steadily growth and ended at under 5 millions in 2038. Furthermore, the youngsters rating between percentages and millions chart both rose dramatically until 1990. The trend in percentages chart then started to decrease at approximately 15 in between 1998 to 2002 before recieving an erratic trend stopped in 2038 around 10%. In contrast, after 1990, the number of youngsters started to decrease gradually in 1998 and went up and down for the end of the period.
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graph illustrates the popularity of Australian children and the youngsters by the numbers and the
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a
80-year-period, starting from 1958.
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, there is
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a
upward trend in percent
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chart
, whereas
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millions
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chart
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recieved
an opposite one.

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million
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chart
at the
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end
of the period. The
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percentage
of kids then decreased
slightly
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before
having a fluctuation from 2014 to the ending.
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, the
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millions
one hit a
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small
peak at 4 after
gradually
increasing from 1958 to 1970. This
was followed
by a
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steadily growth
and ended at under 5
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millions
in 2038.

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, the youngsters rating between
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and
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millions
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chart
both rose
dramatically
until 1990. The trend in
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percentages
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chart
then
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started
to decrease at approximately 15 in
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between 1998 to 2002
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before
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recieving
an erratic trend
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stopped
in 2038 around 10%.
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, after 1990, the number of youngsters
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started
to decrease
gradually
in 1998 and went up and down for the
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of the period.
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IELTS academic The given graph illustrates the popularity of Australian children and the youngsters by the numbers and the percentages for a 80-year-period, starting from 1958.

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