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The given diagram shows the process of making fruid cans

The given diagram shows the process of making fruid cans GMyjo
The given diagram illustrates the process of creating foods by plants. As is observed from the given illustrations plants use sunlight and carbon dioxide to create their foods. On top of that the created foods are used for their growth and repair. According to the given diagram, plants take mineral from the soil using their roots. The green leaves of the plant use sunlight and Carbon dioxide to generate sugars. The carbon dioxide is also preserved by the plant. The created sugar by the photosynthesis process is preserved and this is an important ingredient which is changed to starch. This is a vital element for growth and repair of the plant. In summary, the plant use the sunlight and carbon dioxide to produce the necessary foods the need. On the other hand mineral are collected by the plant from the soil and the plant intake this mineral using their roots.
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illustrations
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sunlight and
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dioxide to create their
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foods
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the created
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foods
are
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used
for their growth and repair.

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diagram,
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take mineral from the soil using their roots. The green
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leaves
of the
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sunlight and
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Carbon
dioxide to generate sugars. The
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dioxide is
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created sugar by the photosynthesis process
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and this is an
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ingredient which is
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changed
to starch. This is a vital element for growth and repair of the plant.

In summary, the
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plant
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the sunlight and
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carbon
dioxide to produce the necessary
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foods
the need.
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mineral
are collected
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plant
from the soil and the
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intake this mineral using their roots.
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IELTS academic The given diagram shows the process of making fruid cans

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6.5
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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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