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The bar chart illustrates the proportion of women, men and children consuming five serving of fruit and vegetables each day in 8 years from 2001 to 2008 in the UK.

The bar chart illustrates the proportion of women, men and children consuming five serving of fruit and vegetables each day in 8 years from 2001 to 2008 in the UK. g5R7A
The bar chart illustrates the proportion of women, men and children consuming five serving of fruit and vegetables each day in 8 years from 2001 to 2008 in the UK. Overall, it can be seen that the highest percentage of all people consuming fruit and vegetable was women, while children consistently accounted for the lowest proportion. Furthermore, a significant increase in the proportion of people eating these food items can be seen over the period given. The percentage of women who ate fruit and vegetables started at just over 20% in 2001. This figure then rose steadily to reach a peak almost 35% in 2006, before falling slightly to 30% in the final year. In terms of men and children eating fruit and vegetables, the rate remained relatively stable in the first three years (about 17% and 12% respectively). From this point, the proportion of men climbed gradually to peak at about 27% in both 2006 and 2007, after which it dropped to about 26%. A similar growth in the figure for children was evident reaching 25% in 2007 and around 24% in the final year.
The bar chart illustrates the
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of women,
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men
and
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children
consuming five serving of
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fruit
and
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vegetables
each day in 8 years from 2001 to 2008 in the UK.

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, it can be
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seen
that the highest percentage of all
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people
consuming
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fruit
and
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vegetable
was women, while
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children
consistently
accounted for the lowest
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proportion
.
Furthermore
, a significant increase in the
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proportion
of
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people
eating these food items can be
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seen
over the period
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given
.

The percentage of women who ate
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fruit
and
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vegetables
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started
at
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just
over 20% in 2001. This figure then rose
steadily
to reach a peak almost 35% in 2006,
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before
falling
slightly
to 30% in the final year.

In terms of
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men
and
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children
eating
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fruit
and
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vegetables
, the rate remained
relatively
stable in the
first
three years (about 17% and 12%
respectively
). From this point, the
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proportion
of
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men
climbed
gradually
to peak at about 27% in both 2006 and 2007, after which it dropped to about 26%. A similar growth in the figure for
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children
was evident reaching 25% in 2007 and around 24% in the final year.
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