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The given diagram depicts the process of brick making for the building industry.

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The given diagram depicts the process of brick making for the building industry. Overall, what stands out from the diagram is that this process consists of seven steps, starts from the digging of clay and ends by delivering the bricks to the building industry. To commence with, first of all, an automobile called digger, digg the clay from the land. After that, the digged clay transferred on to the metal grid which has small holes on it and from that holes digged soil separated on to the roller and some rock and others soil substance stay on the metal grid which is known as wastage. Now the soil which is on roller brought to the brick factory where it mixed up with water. After mixing, the mixture poured into the wire cutter where rectangular shape bricks formed. Moreover, the mixture also poured into the rectangular shape mound and by that bricks get their shape. In addition, the formed bricks are now delivered for the drying process in the oven where it kept for drying up to 24 to 48 hours. Then, the bricks sent for heating process into the kinns where is heated up to 1300 degree Celsius. After the completion of heating process, bricks undergoes into the cooling chamber for 48 to 72 hours for cooling. In the final step, bricks are been delivered for packaging and after packaging, bricks are now ready for the delivery.
The
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given
diagram depicts the
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process
of
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brick
making for the building industry.

Overall
, what stands out from the diagram is that this
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process
consists of seven steps,
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starts
from the digging of clay and ends by delivering the
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bricks
to the building industry.

To commence with,
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first of all
, an automobile called digger,
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digg
the clay from the land. After that, the
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digged
clay transferred on to the metal grid which has
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small
holes on it and from that holes
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digged
soil separated on to the roller and
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some
rock
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and others
soil substance stay on the metal grid which
is known
as wastage.
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Now
the soil which is on roller brought to the
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brick
factory where it mixed up with water. After mixing, the mixture poured into the wire cutter where rectangular shape
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bricks
formed.
Moreover
, the mixture
also
poured into the rectangular shape mound and by that
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bricks
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get
their shape.

In addition
, the formed
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bricks
are
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now
delivered for the drying
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process
in the oven where it
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kept
for drying up to 24 to 48 hours. Then, the
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bricks
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sent
for heating
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process
into the
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kinns
where
is heated
up to 1300 degree Celsius. After the completion of heating
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process
,
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bricks
undergoes into the cooling chamber for 48 to 72 hours for cooling. In the final step,
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bricks
are been
delivered for packaging and after packaging,
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bricks
are
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now
ready for the delivery.
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IELTS academic The given diagram depicts the process of brick making for the building industry.

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