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THE GIVEN BAR GRAPH SHOWS THE ILLITERACY RATE AMONG GENDERS.

THE GIVEN BAR GRAPH SHOWS THE ILLITERACY RATE AMONG GENDERS. 300Em
The bar graph depicts the illiteracy rate in various regions by gender in the year of 2000. The data has been calibrated in percentage. To embark with, the areas of more literacy rate, the developed countries had most educated people with less than 2% of illiteracy among the individuals. Followed by, Caribbean group, the dwellers of Latin America had just 10% and 11% of uneducated person ratio in males and females respectively. Whereas, in East Asia, around 90% of men were literate, but womens were less educated than men by 12%. Moving further towards the regions of less literacy rate, the estimated illiteracy ratio among the sub-saharan Africa critics was about 3: 5 in males and females sequentially. The Arab states had less educated mens in contrast to sub-saharan Africa by approximately 2%, while the females are more illiterate than men by a significant distinction of around 30%. At last, in South Asia, the men and women hold the illiteracy ratio of around 4: 7 individually. Overall, it is worth noticing that the developed countries had the highest literacy rate, while South Asia region had most illiterate persons.
The bar graph depicts the
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illiteracy
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in various regions by gender in the year of 2000. The data has
been calibrated
in percentage.

To embark with, the areas of more literacy
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rate
, the
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developed countries
had most educated
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people
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less
than 2% of
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illiteracy
among the individuals. Followed by, Caribbean group, the dwellers of Latin America had
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just
10% and 11% of uneducated person ratio in males and females
respectively
. Whereas, in East Asia, around 90% of
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men
were literate,
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womens
were
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less
educated than
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men
by 12%.

Moving
further
towards the regions of
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less
literacy
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rate
, the estimated
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illiteracy
ratio among the
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sub-saharan
Africa critics was about 3: 5 in males and females
sequentially
. The Arab states had
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less
educated
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mens
in contrast
to
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sub-saharan
Africa by approximately 2%, while the females are more illiterate than
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men
by a significant distinction of around 30%. At last, in South Asia, the
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men
and women hold the
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illiteracy
ratio of around 4: 7
individually
.

Overall
, it is worth noticing that the
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developed countries
had the highest literacy
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rate
, while South Asia region had most illiterate persons.
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IELTS academic THE GIVEN BAR GRAPH SHOWS THE ILLITERACY RATE AMONG GENDERS.

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