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The chart below shows the percentage of volunteers by organizations in 2008 and 2014. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

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The two pie charts provided the information about the membership in six different volunteer activities in the years 2008 and 2014. Overall, at the beginning of the period, the figure of participant in educational activity was the highest portion. Whereas the lowest was member of health care activity. On contrast, at the end of the year, environment was the most considerable. Besides, health care which remained unchanged, was the lowest volunteers. In 2008, volunteers prefered to take part in environmental and art activities rather than other activity, at 21 percent and 18 percent respectively. In addition, both sport and other clubs had the same percentage of contributor, at only 18 percent. At last, there was only 7 percent of membership in health care project. In 2014, people chose to work more in sport and educational organizations, accounting for 25 percent and 17 percent respectively. At the same time, both art and other activities which had the proportion decrease 6 percent. The member of health care group was still the smallest, at only 8 percent. In conclusion, the figure of volunteers working in environmental, sport and health care activities, increased slighly. In comparison, it could be seen that there was a reduction in the contribution of members in educational, art and other organizations.
The two pie charts provided the information about the membership in six
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in the years 2008 and 2014.
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was the highest portion.
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health
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care
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activity
. On contrast, at the
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end
of the year, environment was the most considerable.
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,
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health
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which remained unchanged, was the lowest volunteers.

In 2008, volunteers
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prefered
to
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take part
in environmental and art
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rather
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other
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activity
, at 21
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and 18
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, both sport and
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clubs had the same percentage of contributor, at
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only
18
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percent
. At last, there was
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7
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of membership in
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health
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project.

In 2014,
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chose to work more in sport and educational organizations, accounting for 25
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and 17
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respectively
. At the same time, both art and
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other
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activities
which had the proportion decrease 6
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percent
. The member of
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health
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group was
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8 percent.

In conclusion
, the figure of volunteers working in environmental, sport and
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health
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care
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activities
, increased
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, it could be
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that there was a reduction in the contribution of members in educational, art and
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other
organizations.
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IELTS academic The chart below shows the percentage of volunteers by organizations in 2008 and 2014.

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212 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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