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The given bar graph illustrates how often people ate fast food in the restaurants of the USA in 2003, 2006, and 2013.

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The given bar graph illustrates how often people ate fast food in the restaurants of the USA in 2003, 2006, and 2013. Overall, in 2003 and 2006, most people ate fast food once a week, whereas the majority bought it once or twice a month in the year 2013. Surprisingly, daily consumption is the least preferred among all the three years. The largest number of people ate fast food once a week in 2003, which comprised approximately 31%. This percentage swung up by almost 2% in 2006. After seven years, it declined to roughly 27%. On the other hand, the proportion of people who ate it once or twice a month was exactly 30% in 2003, it then plummeted to 25% in 2006 and then surged to about 33% in 2013. In contrast, those who had had junk food in restaurants several times a week were roughly 16%. Three years later, their percentage spiked to 20% and then it dropped by almost 4%. Over 10% of the people ate it a few times a year and the figure remained 15% for both the later years. Extremely few American residents ate it on a daily basis and their figure is just under 5% in three years. Likewise, those who never went to restaurants were merely 5% and less than that.
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in the restaurants of the USA in 2003, 2006, and 2013.

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, in 2003 and 2006, most
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a week, whereas the majority
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it
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or twice a month in the
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2013.
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, daily consumption is the least preferred among all the three years.

The largest number of
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fast
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a week in 2003, which comprised approximately 31%. This percentage swung up by almost 2% in 2006. After seven years, it declined to roughly 27%.
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, the proportion of
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who
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it
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or twice a month was exactly 30% in 2003, it then plummeted to 25% in 2006 and then surged to about 33% in 2013.
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, those who
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had had
junk
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in restaurants several times a week were roughly 16%. Three years later, their percentage spiked to 20% and then it dropped by almost 4%.

Over 10% of the
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it a few times a
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and the figure remained 15% for both the later years.
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few American residents
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it on a daily basis and their figure is
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under 5% in three years.
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IELTS academic The given bar graph illustrates how often people ate fast food in the restaurants of the USA in 2003, 2006, and 2013.

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