Do you want to improve your writing? Try our new evaluation service and get detailed feedback.
Check Your Text it's free

The given bar graph manufacturing

The given bar graph manufacturing jbP8M
The given line graph illustrates the manufacturing output proportionally in the countries of Asia Europe And the rest of the world. The Given data is Calculated in numbers Or figures. From an overall perspective it is apparent That the total manufacturing Production in Europe and Asia Was at rise While the rest of the countries experienced very slow increase in production. Meticulously observing the line graph, it is seen that 1840 the percentage of Asia’s manufacturing production was 50% while in 1880 it got declined to 30% and the latter on, in 1920 it got decreased to 20% in 1960, it got inclined to 25% and in 2000 it peaked to nearly 45% whereas, 1840 to 1920 Europe experienced a proportional inclination from 40% to 50% while in the year of 1960 it got declined to nearly 38% and then on in 2000 it got decreased from 38% to nearly 29%. Further, strengthening the same point of view, is it clear that in 1840 the total manufacturing production of rest of the world was 10% while from 1880 to 1960 there was an inclination in proportion of production of rest of the word which was 25% to nearly 38% whereas, in the year of 2000 it got decreased from nearly 38% to near about 32%.
The
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
given
line graph illustrates the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
manufacturing
output
proportionally
in the countries of Asia Europe And the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
rest
of the world. The
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
Given
data
is Calculated
in numbers Or figures.

From an
overall
perspective it is apparent That the total
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
manufacturing
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
Production
in Europe and Asia Was at rise While the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
rest
of the countries experienced
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
slow increase in production.

Meticulously
observing the line graph, it is
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
seen
that 1840 the percentage of Asia’s
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
manufacturing
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
production
was 50% while in 1880 it
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
got
declined to 30% and the latter on, in 1920 it
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
got
decreased to 20% in 1960, it
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
got
inclined to 25% and in 2000 it peaked to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
nearly
45% whereas, 1840 to 1920 Europe experienced a proportional inclination from 40% to 50% while in the year of 1960 it
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
got
declined to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
nearly
38% and then on in 2000 it
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
got
decreased from 38% to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
nearly
29%.

Further
, strengthening the same point of view, is it
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
clear
that in 1840 the total
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
manufacturing
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
production
of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
rest
of the world was 10% while from 1880 to 1960 there was an inclination in proportion of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
production
of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
rest
of the word which was 25% to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
nearly
38% whereas, in the year of 2000 it
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
got
decreased from
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
nearly
38% to near about 32%.
What do you think?
  • This is funny writingFunny
  • I love this writingLove
  • This writing has blown my mindWow
  • It made me angryAngry
  • It made me sadSad

IELTS academic The given bar graph manufacturing

Academic
  American English
4 paragraphs
215 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • ?
    Include an introduction and conclusion
  • ?
    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • ?
    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • ?
    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Labels Descriptions
  • ?
    Currently is not available
  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
Recent posts
  • 6band
    Summarize the line graph and make comparisons
    The given line graph gives information about the amount of queries received by the Tourist Information Office in a city for six months from January to June in the year 2011. In an overall, the maximum quantity of questions was in person which was in the month of June and the least was by letter or e...
  • 5.5band
    Literacy rate by various regions
    The bar chart indicate the percentage of males and females who can read and write the various regions in 2011. Consequently, that horizontal axis lists the areas and vertical axis represent the percentage. Overall when we compare it can be seen that all surveyed men and women from Central Asia and c...
  • 6.5band
    The table below shows the number of cars sold in domestic and international market of auto companies in India.
    The table provides sales data of renowned automobile companies namely Nissan, Ford, VW, GM motors in India for the year 2015. It is evident from the statistics that the number of exports is significantly higher than domestic sales. GM India saw the highest export growth in 2015 when compared to the...
  • 6.5band
    The line chart depicts the percentage of people who were unemployed in Australia in the year 2012.
    The given line graph shows the rate of unemployment in Australia in 2012. Overall, it can be seen that unemployment rate in rural areas was considerably higher than that in urban areas in the first quarter of the year. While about 6. 5 % of the rural people were unemployed at the beginning of the ye...
  • 6.5band
    Should children be taught about advertisements at school?
    Nevertheless, education regarding advertising should be compulsory in school because children should know about the adverse effects of advertising from an early age itself. That means, most advertising companies are focused on children, because they are easily attracted to products such as toys and ...
  • 5.5band
    Automated Covid 19 cases recognition from the lung x-ray images using deep learning techniques and K-fold Cross-validation
    Abstract: The Covid-19 pandemic has spread frighteningly and rapidly in all countries of the world, forcing humanity to lead an abnormal life, and the matter has been further complicated by the emergence of new strains of this epidemic, which appear to be more infectious and possibly more dangerous...