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The given bar graph illustrates about imprisonment of people in five countries. The report is represented in from year 1930 to 1980. The data are given in thousands for the calculation of imprisonment in five countries.

The given bar graph illustrates about imprisonment of people in five countries. The report is represented in from year 1930 to 1980. The data are given in thousands for the calculation of imprisonment in five countries. Q5emP
Overall, the survey represented that in 1930 and 1980, Canada and United States had maximum imprisonment, which was nearly 120 thousands and 140 thousands respectively. To begin with, the imprisonment of Great Britain in year 1930 is 30 thousands only and within 50 years gradually increase to 80 thousands respectively. In addition to, Great Britain, Australia, and New Zealand had showed same number of imprisonment in year 1970. On the other hand, in the year 1940 and 1950, Great Britain it showed range between 30 60 thousands. Whereas, in United States and Canada, it showed double in people of imprisonment than other three countries. Moreover, in 1960, all the five countries were gradually increase in range of 60 thousands and 120 thousands.
Overall
, the survey represented that in 1930 and 1980, Canada and United States had maximum
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imprisonment
, which was
nearly
120 thousands and 140 thousands
respectively
.

To
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begin
with, the
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imprisonment
of Great Britain in
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year
1930 is 30 thousands
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only
and within 50 years
gradually
increase to 80 thousands
respectively
.
In addition
to, Great Britain, Australia, and New Zealand had
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showed
same number of
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imprisonment
in
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year
1970.

On the other hand
, in the
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year
1940 and 1950, Great Britain it
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showed
range between 30 60 thousands. Whereas,
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in United States
and Canada, it
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showed
double in
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people
of
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imprisonment
than other three countries.
Moreover
, in 1960, all the five countries were
gradually
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increase
in range of 60 thousands and 120 thousands.
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IELTS academic The given bar graph illustrates about imprisonment of people in five countries. The report is represented in from year 1930 to 1980. The data are given in thousands for the calculation of imprisonment in five countries.

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