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The given bar chart illustrate the employment status of adults in UK nation in year 2003 and 2013.

The given bar chart illustrate the employment status of adults in UK nation in year 2003 and 2013. gWAYa

Overall, the maximum counting of business observed, whereas, minimum percentage of unemployed could be seen in both years. It is evidently seen, there were increase in the percentage of people working in education training, however, the hotel industry, the building industry and the self employment sector, while the medical and business sector saw decrease over this ten year period. Moreover, the unemployment rate also significantly dropped during this time. In 2003, approximately 8%, 3% and 10% of American adults were employed in education training, hotel industry and building respectively. Additionally, the percentage of self employed people almost tripled, from around 10% to just over 30% during the period. In addition to, in 2013, around quarter of the American working population chose to run their own business, which had seen a two fold decrease from 2003. Similarly, percentage of those in the medical industry also dropped by half, from 20 % and 10 %, over the period.

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percentage
 of unemployed could be This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :witnessed
seen
 in both years. It is evidently
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seen
, there were increase in the You use this word too often, consider replacing it withfeeratiobonusproportionchunkrate
percentage
 of This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :individualsnationsociety
people
 working in education training, however
, the hotel You use this word too often, consider replacing it withcommercemanagementbusinesscorporationtradeproduction
industry
, the building You use this word too often, consider replacing it withcommercemanagementbusinesscorporationtradeproduction
industry
 and the self employment sector, while the medical and business sector This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :witnessed
saw
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ten year
 period. Moreover
, the unemployment rate also
significantly
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industry
 and building respectively
. Additionally
, the You use this word too often, consider replacing it withfeeratiobonusproportionchunkrate
percentage
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self employed
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people
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just
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own
 business, which had This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :witnessed
seen
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two fold
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percentage
 of those in the medical You use this word too often, consider replacing it withcommercemanagementbusinesscorporationtradeproduction
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also
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