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the bar chart show population aged 65 and above for three countries

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The bar chart illustrates, proportion population aged 65 and above of Canada, Germany and UK for 1980 and 2020, as well as gives prediction for 2030. Overall, all the three countries had percentage population trending upwards as the years kept moving forward. It is quite noticeable, Canada started with 10% population aged above 65, which was the least among given countries, in 2000, it jumped 50% of what it was in 1980 and had 15% total population above age 65, the uptrend continued as per the given prediction, in year 2030 it is predicted to jump more than 1/3rd of what it was in 2000 and end up with population around 22% aged above 65 in the year 2030. The surge continued for Germany and UK, but the growth rate was not as sharp as it was for Canada. In 1980, for UK, the percentage population above age 65 was marginally below 15% and it increased slightly to touch 15% in 2020. In the year 2030, the percentage of population above 65 peaked, for UK, with percentage slightly below 1/5th of population above 65.
The bar chart illustrates, proportion
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population
aged 65 and
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above
of Canada, Germany and UK for 1980 and 2020,
as well
as gives prediction for 2030.

Overall
, all the three countries had
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percentage
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population
trending upwards as the years
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kept
moving forward.

It is quite noticeable, Canada
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started
with 10%
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population
aged
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above
65, which was the least among
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given
countries, in 2000, it jumped 50% of what it was in 1980 and had 15% total
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population
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above
age 65, the uptrend continued as per the
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given
prediction, in
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year
2030 it
is predicted
to jump more than 1/3rd of what it was in 2000 and
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end
up with
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around 22% aged
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above
65 in the
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2030.

The surge continued for Germany and UK,
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the growth rate was not as sharp as it was for Canada. In 1980, for UK, the
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percentage
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population
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above
age 65 was
marginally
below 15% and it increased
slightly
to touch 15% in 2020. In the
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2030, the
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of
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population
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65 peaked, for UK, with
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slightly
below 1/5th of
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