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The given bar chart depicts the information about the teaching hours spent by teachers in school four countries namely,japan, Spain, Iceland and the USA in the year 2001.

The given bar chart depicts the information about the teaching hours spent by teachers in school four countries namely, japan, Spain, Iceland and the USA in the year 2001. 2l3Yo
Firstly, primary school teachers spent relatively same amount of time for teaching in Japan, Spain and Iceland approximately 600. whereas, Usa spent more than 900 hours for primary students. similarly, lower secondry teachers spent more than 600 hours for teaching in all the given countries, and instead Usa makes up teaching hours about 1000 hours. Secondly, Spain and Iceland teachers use their time for teaching in upper secondry with 1000 and 800 hours. While, japan and Usa use their number of hours with 700 and near 1200 hours respectively. Moreover, japan for relatively lower amount of teaching hours in three division compared to other countries in 2001. Overall, teachers spent much time on upper secondry schools in contrast with other two types of schools.
Firstly
, primary school
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teachers
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spent
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same amount of time for
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teaching
in Japan, Spain and Iceland approximately 600.
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whereas
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Usa
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spent
more than 900
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hours
for primary students.
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similarly
, lower
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secondry
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teachers
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spent
more than 600
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hours
for
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teaching
in all the
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given
countries, and
instead
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Usa
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makes
up
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teaching
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hours
about 1000
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hours
.
Secondly
, Spain and Iceland
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teachers
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use
their time for
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teaching
in upper
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secondry
with 1000 and 800
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hours
. While, japan and
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Usa
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use
their number of
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hours
with 700 and near 1200
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hours
respectively
.
Moreover
, japan for
relatively
lower amount of
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teaching
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hours
in three division compared to other countries in 2001.
Overall
,
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teachers
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spent
much time on upper
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secondry
schools
in contrast
with other two types of schools.

IELTS academic The given bar chart depicts the information about the teaching hours spent by teachers in school four countries namely, japan, Spain, Iceland and the USA in the year 2001.

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