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The bar chart illustrates data about the proportion of car trips taken by men and women with various aims in 2005.

The bar chart illustrates data about the proportion of car trips taken by men and women with various aims in 2005. dk65r
The bar chart illustrates data about the proportion of car trips taken by men and women with various aims in 2005. Overall, the percentages of work of both genders were the highest while those of visiting town of women and bank of men were the lowest. Another interesting point is that almost intentions of car trips were taken by the female more than the male. Looking at the details, as regards work, the figure accounted for around 39% from women, compared to roughly 52% from men. In addition, for women, shopping became the second highest estimated percentage (aboout 18%) whereas the proportion of recreation was the highest from men (approximately 11%) By contrast, around 2% of visiting town was taken by the female. Furthermore, the proportion of bank of men made up about 3% and that of women was nearly 9%.
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with various aims in 2005.

Overall
, the percentages of work of both genders were the highest while those of visiting town of
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women
and bank of
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men
were the lowest. Another interesting point is that almost intentions of car trips
were taken
by the female more than the male.

Looking at the
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details
, as regards work, the figure accounted for around 39% from
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women
, compared to roughly 52% from
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men
.
In addition
, for
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women
, shopping became the second highest estimated percentage (
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18%) whereas the proportion of recreation was the highest from
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men
(approximately 11%)

By contrast, around 2% of visiting town
was taken
by the female.
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, the proportion of bank of
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men
made up about 3% and that of
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was
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