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The give diagram shows how wool is produced for personal and industrial use.

The give diagram shows how wool is produced for personal and industrial use. 01Q9
The process illustrates the syeps involved in the making of wool for personal and industrial use. Overall it can be seen that the process consists of eight main steps. The process begins with the shearing of sheep and ends with knitted sweaters or commercially made jackets and carpets. Looking at the process in more detail, in the first step, the sheep are shared, and the wool obtained from the sheep is cleaned. The wool is the dried. Following this, the wool is spun wool. Some of the wool is also recycled. Then, the strings are stored as tufts. In the second last step, the balls of yarn are made by spinning. Finally, either the yarn is sold to consumers for knitting or it is used to make jacket or carpets in industries.
The
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illustrates the
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involved in the making of
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wool
for personal and industrial
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use
.
Overall
it can be
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seen
that the
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consists of eight main steps. The
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process
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begins
with the shearing of sheep and ends with knitted sweaters or
commercially
made jackets and carpets. Looking at the
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process
in more detail, in the
first
step, the sheep
are shared
, and the
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wool
obtained from the sheep
is cleaned
. The
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wool
is the dried. Following this, the
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wool
is spun
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wool
.
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Some of the
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wool
is
also
recycled. Then, the strings
are stored
as tufts. In the second last step, the balls of yarn
are made
by spinning.
Finally
, either the yarn
is sold
to consumers for knitting or it is
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used
to
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make
jacket or carpets in industries.

IELTS academic The give diagram shows how wool is produced for personal and industrial use.

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