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The following chart provides information regarding the fertility in birth per women in six gulf states from 1990 to 2000.

The following chart provides information regarding the fertility in birth per women in six gulf states from 1990 to 2000. 1a5LM
The given bar chart shows the ratio of live births each women in six Middle-East countries in the years 1990 to 2000. Overall, it can be seen that, in the last period every states shows downwards trend. Oman birth rate's were highest in both periods. In contrast, Bahrain fertility rates touch the lowest point. To begin with, in 1990 Bahrain and Kuwait birth rates were similar and repeatedly the ratio's was 3. 5%. In the year 2000 Bahrain's birth rates slightly declined and it was 2. 5%. On the other hand, Kuwait fertility rate approximately 2. 8%. In 1990 Qatar and UAE's birth ratios were almost closer, those were accordingly 4. 1% and 4%. In 2000 Qatar's birth rate slightly decreased and that almost 3. 8%, however, UAE's fertility ratio was 2. 8%. Oman virtility rate in 1990 was peak of the point and that was 7%. While, Saudi-Arabia's birth rate approximately 6. 8%. In the year 2000 the both countries birth ratio's were alike and those were accordingly 5. 5%.
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each women in six Middle-East countries in the years 1990 to 2000.

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approximately 2. 8%. In 1990 Qatar and UAE's
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in 1990 was peak of the point and that was 7%.
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approximately 6. 8%. In the year 2000 the both countries
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IELTS academic The following chart provides information regarding the fertility in birth per women in six gulf states from 1990 to 2000.

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