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The graph below shows cinema attendance by. age in great britain. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown.

The graph below shows cinema attendance by. age in great britain. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown. x2mm1
The line graph depicts cinema attendance from age in great britain. It is clear that from the graph that in 1984 the highest had 20 percentage but in 1988 to 1996 above 60% and in great britain the increased by 15 -24 age shot up in 2003. Then, in 1984 to 2003 had same level by 7 to 35 age. Similarly, the lowest report for a university lecturer in 1984 to 1996 by 35 and over age. Therefore, in 2000 slowly rise of 15 percentage. Overall, it is clear that iprove lecturer from 15-24 age in 1992 and 2003 as compared to other ages.
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in 1988 to 1996 above 60% and in
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the increased by 15 -24
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shot up in 2003. Then, in 1984 to 2003 had same level by 7 to 35
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rise of 15 percentage.
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lecturer from 15-24
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IELTS academic The graph below shows cinema attendance by. age in great britain. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown.

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