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The first pie chart provide information about how energy is used in average Australian household.

The first pie chart provide information about how energy is used in average Australian household. GNrJx
The first pie chart provide information about how energy is used in average Australian household. The second pie chart shows the greenhouse gas emission which result from this energy use. Overall, it is observed that, the most prominent use being that of water heating and heating in Australian household energy use, while, the percentage of heating resource was decling Australian household greenhouse gas emissions. At the first sight it can be observed that, the most significant amounts are used for water heating and heating which one-third and 42percent respectively, while, other applicances and refrigator accounted for a considerable proportion. In contrast, cooling and lighting were lowest using energy 2 and 4 percent correspondingly. As far as the second pie chart is concerned that, the greatest expenses were water heating and other applicances (32 and well –over 30 percent accordingly ), compared with 15 and 30 percent in utilizing of energy. It is interesting to note that, heating consumption decreased 17 percent compared to 42 %in using nergy of Australian household. As for pie chart, the percentage of refrigator and lighting ependitures doubled increase greenhouse gas emissions which is from 11% to 22%.
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first
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provide information about how
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energy
is
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used
in average Australian household. The second
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pie
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chart
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shows
the greenhouse gas emission which result from this
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energy
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use
.

Overall
, it
is observed
that, the most prominent
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use
being that of water
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heating
and
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heating
in Australian household
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energy
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use
, while, the percentage of
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heating
resource was
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decling
Australian household greenhouse gas emissions.

At the
first
sight it can
be observed
that, the most significant amounts are
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used
for water
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heating
and
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heating
which one-third and
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42percent
respectively
, while, other
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applicances
and
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refrigator
accounted for a considerable proportion.
In contrast
, cooling and lighting were lowest using
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energy
2 and 4
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percent
correspondingly
.

As far as the second
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pie
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chart
is concerned
that, the greatest expenses were water
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heating
and other
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applicances
(32 and well –over 30
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percent
accordingly
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)
, compared with 15 and 30
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percent
in utilizing of
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energy
. It is interesting to note that,
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heating
consumption decreased 17
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percent
compared to 42
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%in
using
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nergy
of Australian household.

As for
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pie
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chart
, the percentage of
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refrigator
and lighting
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ependitures
doubled increase greenhouse gas emissions which is from 11% to 22%.
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IELTS academic The first pie chart provide information about how energy is used in average Australian household.

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