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The first pie chart below shows how energy is used in an average Australian household.The second chart shows the greenhouse gas emissions which result from this energy use.

The first pie chart below shows how energy is used in an average Australian household. The second chart shows the greenhouse gas emissions which result from this energy use. MMMOL
The first pie chart illustrates the data about energy consumption in an average Australian household in percentage. On the other hand, the second pie chart depicts the information regarding greenhouse gas emissions which generates from energy usage. To commence with, the highest Australian household energy consumption is witnessed by heating which is accounted for 42% whereas the least energy utilisation is noticed by cooling which is amounted to 2%, which is half of lighting(4%). Similarly, the channelization of energy by water is at 30% which is followed by other appliances which is amounted to 15%. Only 7% of household energy is used by refrigeration which is approximately half of refrigeration (15%). Turning to the details of Australian household greenhouse gas emissions, the maximum greenhouse fumes emission is noticed by water heating which is amounted to 32% which is further followed by other appliances at 28%. The emitting of greenhouse gas by refrigeration is 14% which is half of the other appliances(28%). Similarly, this trend is followed by heating which account for 15% is more than half of water heating (32%). The least greenhouse fumes is evident by cooling is amounted to 3% which is relatively low in comparison with lighting(8%). Overall, the maximum household energy is consumed by heating, but in case of greenhouse gas emission heating is unexpectedly low. Similarly, the upsurge is seen in greenhouse gas emission by refrigeration and other appliances rather than of their use.
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first
pie chart illustrates the data about
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consumption in an average Australian
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household
in percentage. On the
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other
hand, the second pie chart depicts the information regarding
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greenhouse
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gas
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emissions
which generates from
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energy
usage. To commence with, the highest Australian
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household
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energy
consumption
is witnessed
by
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heating
which
is accounted
for 42% whereas the least
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energy
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utilisation
is noticed
by cooling which
is amounted
to 2%, which is
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half
of lighting(4%).
Similarly
, the channelization of
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energy
by water is at 30% which
is followed
by
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other
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appliances
which
is amounted
to 15%.
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is
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by refrigeration which is approximately
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of refrigeration (15%). Turning to the
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of Australian
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household
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greenhouse
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gas
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emissions
, the maximum
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greenhouse
fumes
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emission
is noticed
by water
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heating
which
is amounted
to 32% which is
further
followed by
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other
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appliances
at 28%. The emitting of
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greenhouse
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gas
by refrigeration is 14% which is
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half
of the
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other
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appliances(28%)
.
Similarly
, this trend
is followed
by
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heating
which account for 15% is more than
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of water
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heating
(32%). The least
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greenhouse
fumes is evident by cooling
is amounted
to 3% which is
relatively
low
in comparison
with lighting(8%).
Overall
, the maximum
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household
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energy
is consumed
by
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heating
,
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in case of
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greenhouse
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gas
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emission
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heating
is
unexpectedly
low.
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seen
in
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gas
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emission
by refrigeration and
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other
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appliances
rather
than of their
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use
.
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IELTS academic The first pie chart below shows how energy is used in an average Australian household. The second chart shows the greenhouse gas emissions which result from this energy use.

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