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The first line graph gives information about the proportion of households who owned a washing machine, refrigerator and vacuum cleaner while the second graph depicts the number of hours a household spent on housework in a particular country from 1920 to 2019.

The first line graph gives information about the proportion of households who owned a washing machine, refrigerator and vacuum cleaner while the second graph depicts the number of hours a household spent on housework in a particular country from 1920 to 2019. PMPXB
The first line graph gives information about the proportion of households who owned a washing machine, refrigerator and vacuum cleaner while the second graph depicts the number of hours a household spent on housework in a particular country from 1920 to 2019. It is clear that most family didn't have a fridge in 1920 and the percentage of households owned all 3 appliances were rising sharply. In addition, the amount of time a household spent on domestic chores has been decreasing steadily. In 1920, almost no family owned a refrigerator but the figure was increasing considerably and it reached its peak in 1980 at 100%. Moreover, the proportion of households owning a vacuum cleaner was rising gradually until it reached 100% in the year 2000. The percentage of households who had a washing machine was increase things slowly, despite a drop in 1980 and just over 70 percent of households own washing machine at the end of the period. The number of hours families spent on chores, however, was decreasing, from 50 percent in 1922 just over 110 in 1990.
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first
line graph gives information about the proportion of
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households
who
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owned
a washing machine, refrigerator and vacuum cleaner while the second graph depicts the number of hours a
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household
spent on housework in a particular country from 1920 to 2019. It is
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clear
that most family didn't have a fridge in 1920 and the percentage of
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households
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owned
all 3 appliances were rising
sharply
.
In addition
, the amount of time a
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household
spent on domestic chores has been decreasing
steadily
.

In 1920, almost no family
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owned
a refrigerator
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but
the figure was increasing
considerably
and it reached its peak in 1980 at 100%.
Moreover
, the proportion of
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households
owning a vacuum cleaner was rising
gradually
until it reached 100% in the year 2000. The percentage of
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households
who had a washing machine was increase things
slowly
, despite a drop in 1980 and
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just
over 70 percent of
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households
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own
washing machine at the
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end
of the period.

The number of hours families spent on chores,
however
, was decreasing, from 50 percent in 1922
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just
over 110 in 1990.

IELTS academic The first line graph gives information about the proportion of households who owned a washing machine, refrigerator and vacuum cleaner while the second graph depicts the number of hours a household spent on housework in a particular country from 1920 to 2019.

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