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The first line graph gives information about the figure for train travellers, and the given second line graph shows the proportion of this transport running on time and standard line over a 9-year period, starting from 2000.

The first line graph gives information about the figure for train travellers, and the given second line graph shows the proportion of this transport running on time and standard line over a 9-year period, starting from 2000. 9BqEr
The first line graph gives information about the figure for train travellers, and the given second line graph shows the proportion of this transport running on time and standard line over a 9-year period, starting from 2000. It is noticeable that the number of people using trains increased steadily over the period shown. We can also see that the percentage of trains running on time went up dramatically between 2000 and 2009. Looking at the information in more detail, we can see that there was a slight growth in the number of train customers from 2000 to 2002, but those hit a low to over 35% in 2003. A sharp rise was seen in those of train passengers and reached a peak around 45% in 2005. After that time, those dropped marginally and a small rose in 2009. From 2000 to 2004, there was a significant upturn in the percentage of trains running punctually. Over the following 2 year, those fell and hit a low of 92% in 2006. Finally, the proportion of this transport running on time rose again and reached a peak of about 97% in 2008 before maintaining the road.
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travellers
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second line graph
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the proportion of this transport
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and standard line
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over
a 9-year period, starting from 2000.

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people
using
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trains
increased
steadily
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the period shown. We can
also
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see
that the percentage of
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trains
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running
on
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time
went up
dramatically
between 2000 and 2009.

Looking at the information in more detail, we can
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see
that there was a slight growth in the number of
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train
customers from 2000 to 2002,
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but
those hit a low to
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over
35% in 2003. A sharp rise was
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seen
in those of
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train
passengers and reached a peak around 45% in 2005. After that
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time
, those dropped
marginally
and a
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small
rose in 2009.

From 2000 to 2004, there was a significant upturn in the percentage of
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trains
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running
punctually
.
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the following 2 year, those fell and hit a low of 92% in 2006.
Finally
, the proportion of this transport
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running
on
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time
rose again and reached a peak of about 97% in 2008
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before
maintaining the road.

IELTS academic The first line graph gives information about the figure for train travellers, and the given second line graph shows the proportion of this transport running on time and standard line over a 9-year period, starting from 2000.

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