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Some people, however, believe that less homework mean less stress for children so they will be able to learn others useful skills

Some people, however, believe that less homework mean less stress for children so they will be able to learn others useful skills yL66E
Less homework means less worry for children so they can learn many useful skills. After classes, children only need to spend about one or two hour to complete their homework then children should be allowed to participate in physical play activities such as soccer, jumping, swimming. Children participate in physical activities, they can develop more emotional skills and better health. A child who regularly spends time swimming every day will be taller than children who spend too much time doing exercises. Furthermore, with less homework, children can play with family members more. Parents can teach children basic survival skills like cooking. Teach children how to cook simple dishes such as fried eggs and boiled vegetables and give them good habits such as washing dishes, cleaning the table after eating. These activities will help children develop both IQ, EQ and it also helps children have better health, better communication ability and be more active instead of spending more time doing homework.
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participate in physical activities, they can develop more emotional
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and better health. A child who
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who spend too much time doing exercises.
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,
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can play with family members more. Parents can teach
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basic survival
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like cooking. Teach
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how to cook simple dishes such as fried eggs and boiled vegetables and give them
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habits such as washing dishes, cleaning the table after eating. These activities will
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develop both IQ, EQ and it
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have better health, better communication ability and be more active
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IELTS academic Some people, however, believe that less homework mean less stress for children so they will be able to learn others useful skills

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