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The first chart shows the percentage of the appliances that use energy and the second chart show greenhouse gas emission.

The first chart shows the percentage of the appliances that use energy and the second chart show greenhouse gas emission. MMBBa
The first chart shows the percentage of the appliances that use energy and the second chart show greenhouse gas emission. Heating is the highest percent of the first chart. It’s 42%. And next, water heating 30%, other appliances 15%, refrigeration 7%, lighting 4% and cooling 2%, respectively. But the second chart water heating is the highest percent. It’s 32%. And next, other appliances 28%, heating 15%, refrigeration 14%, lighting 8% and cooling 3%, respectively. So, The big thing is clearly seen is different of percentage of 2 charts. For the first one, heating is the highest but it upside down to
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15%, refrigeration 14%, lighting 8% and cooling 3%,
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IELTS academic The first chart shows the percentage of the appliances that use energy and the second chart show greenhouse gas emission.

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