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The charts below show the percentage of time younger and older people spend on various internat activities in their free time.

The charts below show the percentage of time younger and older people spend on various internat activities in their free time. GMr9g
The pie charts illustrate the percentage of time youngster and older people spend their lesiure time by using various internat activities As it observed in the pie charts, the age group of 18-26 spend their most of time to use social networking at 24%. Although youngster take spend their time in listening music and watching films at 21%. However in purpose of study using internet about searching news such as health data at 20%. Moreover, playing video games on internat at making purchases online (respectively 18% and 12%). Least of time spend on internet to using for making online booking like cinema and travel at just 5%. On the other hand, the trend of making online booking in age of 60- 70 is all-time highest in compare of other internat activities at 25%. In contrast, researching about health data and spending time on internet activities (respectively 22% and 21%). Downloading music and films through internet and making purchasing for online shopping the former 15% and later 12%. The least of amount time spend on internet to playing video games at just 5%. Overall, it can be seen that in youngsters majority of the amount of time spend on social media. While, on the othe hand 60-70 age group using internet for making online ticket booking.
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