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The first chart shows how energy is used in an average australian housefold. the second chart shows the greenhouse gas emissions which result from this energy use

The first chart shows how energy is used in an average australian housefold. the second chart shows the greenhouse gas emissions which result from this energy use LrrR6
These charts below give us the information about the percentage of household's using energy and greenhouse gas emissions in as its resulted in Australia. Overall, the first chart was telling us about how many energy use in household in Australia in different sectors such as heating, cooling, lighting, refrigeration, water heating and other appliances. then, the second chart was giving us the percentage of gas emissions from Australian household which spread in the same sectors with the first chart. Mostly, the household in Australia uses the energy for heating with 42 percent which is following with 30 percent of water heating. The other sector with 15 percent of energy use is in other appliances. Finally, for refrigeration, lighting, and cooling have 7, 4 and 2 percent of using, respectively. Therefore, the emissions of australian household shows the sector with highest emission which is water heating with 32 percent. Following with that, the other appliances gives 28 percent of emissions. then the heating, refrigeration, lighting and cooling have 15, 14, 8, and 3 percent of gas emission.
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IELTS academic The first chart shows how energy is used in an average australian housefold. the second chart shows the greenhouse gas emissions which result from this energy use

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6.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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