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The first chart below gives information about the money spent by British parents on their children sports between 2008 and 2014 . The second chart below shows the number of children who participated in three sports in britain over the same time period.

The line graphs illustrate how much the average monthly expenditure done on Children's sports and their participation in football, athletics and swimming from 2008 to 2014 in pounds and millions in Britain. Overall, monthly spending money on Children's sports was increasing throughout the period and the highest number of children participated in football. to begin with monthly expenditure on Children's food was around 20 Pounds in 2008. However, it increased gradually and reached a peak at approximately 30 pound. In terms of participation in football, it accounted for around 8 million in the year 2008. Despite a slight increase, it remained same around 9 million in the year 2014. However, as regards to swimming and athletics sports, below 2. 5 milion children were participated in the beginning year. Childrens participation in the athletics sports increased slightly and exceeding 2. 5 million in 2011 and overtook swimming activities. It reached at 5 in 2014. Whereas, the lowest figure for swimming activity was around 3 in 2014.
The line graphs illustrate how much the average monthly expenditure done on Children's
sports
and their participation in football, athletics and swimming from 2008 to 2014 in pounds and
millions
in Britain.

Overall
, monthly spending money on Children's
sports
was increasing throughout the period and the highest number of children participated in football.

to
begin
with monthly expenditure on Children's food was
around
20 Pounds in 2008.
However
, it increased
gradually
and reached a peak at approximately 30 pound.

In terms of participation in football, it accounted for
around
8
million
in the year 2008. Despite a slight increase, it remained same
around
9
million
in the year 2014.
However
, as regards to swimming and athletics
sports
, below 2. 5
milion
children
were participated
in the beginning year.
Childrens
participation in the athletics
sports
increased
slightly
and exceeding 2. 5
million
in 2011 and overtook swimming activities. It reached at 5 in 2014. Whereas, the lowest figure for swimming activity was
around
3 in 2014.
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IELTS academic The first chart below gives information about the money spent by British parents on their children sports between 2008 and 2014. The second chart below shows the number of children who participated in three sports in britain over the same time period.

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