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The pie charts below show the devices people in the 18 to 25 age group use to watch television in Canada In two different years.

The pie charts illustrate the use of devices by the adults to watch television in Canada during the year of 2009 and 2019. Overall, the most striking feature of the pie charts reflect that the ratio of Conventional TV was the highest in 2009 whereas it was the least opted by people during the year 2019. A glance at the chart, in 2009, around 34 per cent of people used Conventional TV to watch this favorite shows which had the highest ratio of user whereas tablets were the least peferable choice. One-fifth percentage of users opted for laptop to watch TV along with that just below 20 per cent used Desktop computer. Candians used Mobile phone were about 15 per cent. Moreover, the second least used device was Flat-screen TV which was preferred by less than 10 per cent of people. Considering the other factors of the chart, it can be observed that the utilization of Flat-screen TV by the people is the highest in 2019 while the Conventional TV has been the least preferables. The second most used device was Mobile phone with more than 25 per cent of users. Deskstop computer as well as Laptop have the similar ratio of Canadian users. In addition to, around 19 per cent of people opted for Tablets to watch television.
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of devices by the adults to
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television in Canada during the year of 2009 and 2019.

Overall
, the most striking feature of the pie
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reflect that the ratio of Conventional TV was the highest in 2009 whereas it was the least opted by
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people
during the year 2019.

A glance at the
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, in 2009, around 34 per cent of
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people
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Conventional TV to
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this favorite
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which had the highest ratio of
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whereas tablets were the least
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peferable
choice. One-fifth percentage of
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opted for laptop to
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TV along with that
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below 20 per cent
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Desktop computer.
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Candians
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Mobile phone were about 15 per cent.
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device was Flat-screen TV which
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people
.

Considering the other factors of the
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, it can
be observed
that the utilization of Flat-screen TV by the
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the highest in 2019 while

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preferables
. The second most
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device was Mobile phone with more than 25 per cent of
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.
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Deskstop
computer
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as Laptop have the similar ratio of Canadian
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.
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to, around 19 per cent of
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opted for Tablets to
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television.
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IELTS academic The pie charts below show the devices people in the 18 to 25 age group use to watch television in Canada In two different years.

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