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The line graphs compare the numbers of international and local students in Australia between 2001 and 2010.

The line graphs compare the numbers of international and local students in Australia between 2001 and 2010. It is clear that each year more and more students were studying at Australian universities. Although the proportion of the overseas was quite low relative to the local ones, but that number increased dramatically over 10 years. To begin with, the line graphs of international students have straightly upward trends. There were only 20 thousand of international students in total in 2001, with about half of that commencing. Since that, the figures, for both studying and applying students, increased more than fourfold, rising steadily each year and reaching peaks of over 80 and 40 thousand respectively in 2010. As for the local students, the figure total rocketed from 400 to 600 thousand during the first 6 years and then levelled off at this level for the rest of the period. However, the number of local applicants fluctuated but, overall, increased from around 17 thousand to a little over 20 thousand
The line graphs compare the numbers of international and
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in Australia between 2001 and 2010.

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that each year more and more
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students
were studying at Australian universities. Although the proportion of the overseas was quite low relative to the
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local
ones,
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that number increased
dramatically
over 10 years.

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with, the line graphs of international
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have
straightly
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only
20 thousand of international
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students
in total in 2001, with about half of that commencing. Since that, the figures, for both studying and applying
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students
, increased more than fourfold, rising
steadily
each year and reaching peaks of over 80 and 40 thousand
respectively
in 2010.

As for the
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local
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, the figure total rocketed from 400 to 600 thousand during the
first
6 years and then levelled off at this level for the rest of the period.
However
, the number of
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applicants fluctuated
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,
overall
, increased from around 17 thousand to a
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over 20 thousand
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