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The figure reveals the using and manufacture of oil in China between 1982 and 2006.

The figure reveals the using and manufacture of oil in China between 1982 and 2006. b2aDP
The figure reveals the using and manufacture of oil in China between 1982 and 2006. It can be seen from the graph that the line graph always showed the upward trend in both aspects and the highest consumption and production was both in 2006, the lowest of them was from 1992 to 1990 and 1982 respectively. First of all, export remained stable at 2 million barrels per day and then rose gradually more than 1, 5 millions. After that the raising reached the peak in 1994 then rose steadily by 1998. Nevertheless, the last period between 2002 and 2006 the depletion fluctuated dramatically at approximately 7 millions oil barrels. Furthermore, the production started at 2 million oil barrels and grew moderately in through 8 years at roundly 3, 5 millions. Subsequently, the line graph was stable at 3 millions, until 2016 the growing was marginally over the 3, 5 millions barrels. Especially, the creation in 2006 led the way with nearly 4 millions oil barrels each day.
The figure reveals the using and manufacture of
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oil
in China between 1982 and 2006.

It can be
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seen
from the graph that the line graph always
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showed
the upward trend in both aspects and the highest consumption and production was both in 2006, the lowest of them was from 1992 to 1990 and 1982
respectively
.

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First of all
, export remained stable at 2
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million
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barrels
per day and then rose
gradually
more than 1, 5
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millions
.
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After
that the raising reached the peak in 1994 then rose
steadily
by 1998.
Nevertheless
, the last period between 2002 and 2006 the depletion fluctuated
dramatically
at approximately 7
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millions
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oil
barrels.

Furthermore
, the production
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started
at 2
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million
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oil
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barrels
and grew
moderately
in through 8 years at
roundly
3, 5
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millions
.
Subsequently
, the line graph was stable at 3
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millions
, until 2016 the growing was
marginally
over the 3, 5
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millions
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barrels
.
Especially
, the creation in 2006 led the way with
nearly
4
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oil
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each day.

IELTS academic The figure reveals the using and manufacture of oil in China between 1982 and 2006.

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167 words
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