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The enrolment of students into Australian Universities is usually a diverse affair, there are two major types of students who enroll into these, the native Australian students and the students from the overseas.

The enrolment of students into Australian Universities is usually a diverse affair, there are two major types of students who enroll into these, the native Australian students and the students from the overseas. IT is very interesting that the students enrolling into these institutions have linearly increased over the time. for example in 2001 the total number of students that enrolled were around 30000 where as in 2010 its is roughly around 120000, the graph was not clearly mentionly which colour belongs to which category of the students. but it is clear that one section has dramatically increased from 20000 in 2001 to 80000 plus but below 90000 in 2010 thats an a very encouraging 4 times increase i asume it is the overseas students. how ever the data shows that the the locals number raised from 10000 to 40000, also 4 times, which is similar to that of the other category.
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into Australian Universities is
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a diverse affair, there are two major types of
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students
who enroll into these, the native Australian
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students
and the
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from the overseas.

IT is
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interesting that the
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enrolling into these institutions have
linearly
increased over the time.
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example in 2001 the total number of
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students
that enrolled were around 30000
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where as
in 2010 its is roughly around 120000, the graph was not
clearly
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mentionly
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belongs to which category of the
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.
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it is
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that one section has
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below 90000 in 2010
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encouraging 4 times increase i
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the the
locals number raised from 10000 to 40000,
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IELTS academic The enrolment of students into Australian Universities is usually a diverse affair, there are two major types of students who enroll into these, the native Australian students and the students from the overseas.

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2 paragraphs
152 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
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