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Provided bar chart illustrates the amount of workers in two large companies measured in percentage who spent time in hours to do exercise each week.

Provided bar chart illustrates the amount of workers in two large companies measured in percentage who spent time in hours to do exercise each week. The table demonstrates the absence of employees due to the illness, in same 2012 year. Generally, Birmingham department employees showed exercising activity rather than London department staff, also missed workdays was comparatively lower in Birmingham in respective year. To begin, big gaps was in exercise spent less than 5 and between 10 and 15 hours. Birmingham department staff spent 15 and 25%, while London department 35 and 10 % respectively. Consequently in Birmingham was twice as much as London healthy employees, they are 380 who never absent in work place due to illnesses. London department workers demonstrate higher result in 1-5days per year absenteeism owing to disease in 2012. The highest point approximately 50% employees in both department, exercise 5-10 hours per week. In addition, lowest point was same, nearly 10% exercised more than 15hours a week. Nevertheless, more than 5 days a year absenteeism through illness were almost equal 242 and 248.

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hours
 to do exercise each week. The table demonstrates the absence of You use this word too often, consider replacing it withmemberlaborerclerkworkeragentrepresentative
employees
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department
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employees
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 exercising activity rather
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department
 staff, also
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 lower in Birmingham in respective year.

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begin
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big
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. Birmingham You use this word too often, consider replacing it withdivisionofficeareaagencyadministrationcommission
department
 staff spent 15 and 25%, while London You use this word too often, consider replacing it withdivisionofficeareaagencyadministrationcommission
department
 35 and 10 % respectively
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Consequently
 in Birmingham was twice as much as London healthy You use this word too often, consider replacing it withmemberlaborerclerkworkeragentrepresentative
employees
, they are 380 who never absent in work place due to illnesses. London You use this word too often, consider replacing it withdivisionofficeareaagencyadministrationcommission
department
 workers demonstrate higher result in 1-5days per year absenteeism owing to disease in 2012.

The highest point approximately 50% You use this word too often, consider replacing it withmemberlaborerclerkworkeragentrepresentative
employees
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department
, exercise 5-10 You use this word too often, consider replacing it withpointflashjuncturetimedateoccasion
hours
 per week. In addition
, A determiner is probably missing here: “the lowest”.the lowest
lowest
 point was same, nearly
 10% exercised more than You use this word too often, consider replacing it withpointflashjuncturetimedateoccasion
15hours
 a week. Nevertheless
, more than 5 days a year absenteeism through illness were almost equal 242 and 248. 