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The enrollments of students overseas and local students in Australian universities over a ten year period

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The provided two graphs illustrate applications from foreign and local students to Australian universities in the ten year period, from 2001 - 2010. In the graph, it can be seen that in 2001, 20000 foreign students applied to Australian universities. In contrast, commencing rates were slightly lower than the total number of applications at around 16500. Although at the end of the period, even though both sections experienced dramatic increases, the gap between the number of total and commencing enrolments is expanded significantly. And about the local students. commencing rates were always lower than the total number of enrolments and remained stable at around 200000 enrolments with some fluctuations. however, the total number were at 400000 in 2001 but it increased suddenly to 600000 enrolments in 2007 then it remained the same over the period. The number of local students is significantly higher than that of foreign students. Although commencing rates for both types of students was very lower than the total
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students
to Australian universities in the
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ten year
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from 2001 - 2010
.

In the graph, it can be
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that in 2001, 20000 foreign
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students
applied to Australian universities.
In contrast
,
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commencing
rates were
slightly
lower than the
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total
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number
of applications at around 16500. Although at the
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end
of the period,
even though
both sections experienced dramatic increases, the gap between the
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number
of
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total
and
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commencing
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enrolments
is expanded
significantly
.

And about the local
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students
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commencing
rates were always lower than the
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total
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number
of
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enrolments
and remained stable at around 200000
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enrolments
with
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however
, the
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were at 400000 in 2001
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it increased
suddenly
to 600000
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enrolments
in 2007 then it remained the same over the period.

The
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of local
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is
significantly
higher than that of foreign
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students
. Although
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commencing
rates for both types of
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was
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IELTS academic The enrollments of students overseas and local students in Australian universities over a ten year period

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