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The enrollments of students overseas and local students in Australian universities over a ten year period

The enrollments of students overseas and local students in Australian universities over a ten year period 7wEk
The two graphs show student enrolment propensity over ten years, from 2000-2010, in Australia’s universities. Overall, the two graphs demonstrate clearly the increasing demand for Australian university education by overseas students with a dramatically smaller increase by local students for this period of time. The first graph clearly shows that new foreign students continue to apply to Australian universities. In 2010, there were about 80, 000 international students. The increase in the number of international students is dramatic, doubling every five years, from less than 9, 000 to 10. 00 from 2000 to 2005 and then more than 20, 000 in 2010. The local student population was around 600, 000 in 2010, 200, 000 of which were new students. Besides that, new students were accounting for 33% of the total number of localities, this number is down significantly from 50% ten years ago. Trends clearly illustrate that rising is possible expected to continue from foreign students and not for local students.
The two graphs
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propensity over ten years, from 2000-2010, in Australia’s universities.
Overall
, the two graphs demonstrate
clearly
the increasing demand for Australian university education by overseas
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with a
dramatically
smaller increase by local
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for this period of time.

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clearly
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that new foreign
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continue to apply to Australian universities. In 2010, there were about 80, 000 international
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. The increase in the number of international
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is dramatic, doubling every five years, from less than 9, 000 to 10. 00 from 2000 to 2005 and then more than 20, 000 in 2010.

The local
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population was around 600, 000 in 2010, 200, 000 of which were new
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.
Besides
that, new
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were accounting for 33% of the total number of localities, this number is down
significantly
from 50% ten years ago. Trends
clearly
illustrate that rising is possible
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to continue from foreign
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and not for local
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IELTS academic The enrollments of students overseas and local students in Australian universities over a ten year period

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